Universal Paragon Pioneers (by Tobias Tenbusch)

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  1. Gnietschow

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    After building the palace you can unlock one of 11 custodians. Those give you a permanent ability for your following rounds, e.g. ships being twice as fast, a bigger starting island or reduced battle duration. The rest of the game won't change, but you will probably be faster due to the bonus.

    Oh, good to know! The description was improved by a professional proofreader, but the texts on the screenshots were made only by me, but I'm not a native English speaker. I'll try to find some helping me improving that. Thanks for pointing it out!
     
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  2. Anotherkellydown

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    I only see two minor grammar mistakes in the App Store screen shots. If @ste86uk was referring to the blue banners across the screenshots I can help you with that right here.

    The second one, “Fulfill your inhabitants needs” just needs an apostrophe at the end so it reads “Fulfill your inhabitants’ needs”.

    The sixth one, “Over hundred buildings await you” would be clearer if it read “Over one-hundred buildings await you” or “Hundreds of buildings await you” (if there are 200 or more in the game).

    Hope that’s helpful!
     
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  3. ste86uk

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    Yes there weren’t many since it’s only the screenshots, another option for “Over hundred buildings await you” would be an easy fix of just putting A in there, “Over a hundred buildings await you.
     
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  4. Gnietschow

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    @Anotherkellydown and @ste86uk: That helps me a lot, thank you very much! I'll update the screenshots soon :)
     
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  5. Gnietschow

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